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Deer Girl's avatar

Photo: still trying to find out who took this – from Unsplash originally but it was saved on my phone for ages and has been edited.

Simone Senisin's avatar

Gee, your writing holds a something I can't find the words for — I go back and read the in between of imagination, the birds like a bridge, flitting and fighting between worlds. So stunning. 🙏🖤✍️

Deer Girl's avatar

Reading the ‘in between of imagination’ is lovely. I read this back a few times and felt maybe it was a bit too ‘quiet’, so that’s nice to hear! 🕊️

Simone Senisin's avatar

🩶😊🙏

Deer Girl's avatar

🫶🏻

Jay Myser's avatar

It is shocking how much I need to read your words. I stumble upon them as one wandering the desert. Chancing upon an oasis and having forgotten the taste of water...

Deer Girl's avatar

This is very kind of you; thank you. I told myself I wasn’t going to write anything, but then the electricity went and I added new words to an old piece…

Jay Myser's avatar

I hope your electricity stays out 😉

Deer Girl's avatar

Unfortunately, it’s back on now so I can waste a huge amounts of time scrolling. Ha!

Waving From A Distance's avatar

Evocative almost beyond comment.

"Rain pins down the sea."

"When we met I kept checking you against the dream the way you check a bird against the photo in the book."

This is one of your best, I think.

Lischer Tracy's avatar

Yes, my favorite lines too. I see the rain do that often from my deck, even the swells. And see it now in my mind. She’s a poet.

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you Lischer!

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you very much for the kind words. Much appreciated!

pen n. bolsillo's avatar

dreams in isolation = self-care

envelope flap, fluke, swallow's tail, scallop shell = big fan

a sparrow saved = 9/99

Deer Girl's avatar

Please publish a book of these comments x

Chris Heape's avatar

Woah!

What a formidable text.

The way you weave actual birdflight with memory that ends with the lonely, empty estate is quite simply magnificent.

Best, Chris.

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you very much Chris; appreciate you reading and taking the time to comment 🤍

Christopher Van Name's avatar

Your words turn moments into lasting memories. Stringing them together to paint a story filled with mystery, passion and grace. Always grace. Such a joy to read!

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you Christopher, always, for your support.

Margaret Bennett's avatar

‘Rain pins down the sea’. Wonderful.

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you Margaret!

Brandi Lynn's avatar

This is breathtakingly vivid - the imagery of birds weaving through memory, grief, and quiet intimacy feels so raw and beautifully grounded ✨

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you very much Brandi, always appreciate you taking the time to comment! <3

Terrance Lane Millet's avatar

Really lovely. Evocative and haunting. I love this line: " the swallows swim through September."

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Thank you very much Terrance :-)

Petra's avatar

Brilliant! Your way with words and imagery is stunning. You paint word pictures. <3

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Thank you very much Petra! <3

Libertarian's avatar

Was great! This line in particular makes me think that maybe the wild heart wrapped in wool was yours. “until I wrap my grey jumper around one and feel the wild heart through wool. “

Seems like the poem is written from the perspective of someone who was once quite ill and had loving care.

Deer Girl's avatar

I liked the idea of both heartbeats being close! Well put.

Benjamin Fargen's avatar

A new classic. Love it 👏🖤

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you Benjamin <3

The Poetry Moth's avatar

Your writing is truly exquisite.

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you very much; I always appreciate you reading and your kind words <3

Mike Ketch Poetry's avatar

love this … every line spins me across the minds dance floor ..

till I can’t tell me from the music 🧡💜💜

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you Mike! I’m glad you enjoyed dancing <3