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Ms Ludwig's avatar

How much can fit into a single poem: from a kitchen window to Fanad Head, from now in December to an undefined ,,once". I love the interplay between an enclosed and an open space, and between different timelines. So much is evoked, yet so much remains disguised. 🪄

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you very much Frau, for the kind words <3

Paul Jenkin's avatar

Lovely. Hare today, gone tomorrow 😊

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you Paul. (I am now obsessed with hares!)

frank (*)'s avatar

Might be time to revisit Watership Down.. miss you Fiver ;(

Deer Girl's avatar

Watership Down forever <3

Paul Jenkin's avatar

I used to see them, occasionally, near to where I lived. They are quite intelligent and, when Spring arrived, entertaining! Lovely creatures.

Deer Girl's avatar

Ooh, how fun. I don’t see them here; only squirrels!

Kim Williams, M.Div.'s avatar

Beautiful. Broken. And somehow…this carries them both to the knot in my chest and unties it.

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you Kim :)

(Hyped to read something supernatural, by the way!)

frank (*)'s avatar

Might be time to revisit The Bone Clocks??

Kim Williams, M.Div.'s avatar

😬😊

Sam Rasnake's avatar

A wonderfully image driven piece. Strong work.

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you Sam!

Lynn's avatar

as gulls rock the day under.

Can I put that on a little poster for my new grandson's nursery?

Deer Girl's avatar

Of course <3

Jeff Curto - At Home In Time's avatar

"I’d say I wish you were here but you’d ruin my panoramic."

This speaks so much to the dichotomy that always exists for the creative - well, this creative, anyway. Wanting so much to be with someone, but knowing that their absence is what makes the "making" of things possible.

Perfect. And the image reflects that - the vista and the fence that blocks the view.

Deer Girl's avatar

Absolutely! I can definitely relate to that. I really like to be around people – but I absolutely can’t create anything around them…

pen n. bolsillo's avatar

a baptism, indeed.

Kelly Trost's avatar

"Once: your hands going into the tangle of my hair and I went

heavy. The dip of the warm pillow under us. I wanted the cold of you"

Oh, Wow! Holly, I think this one of your best. I may seem like I have quit reading you but I'm still here, just not able to do as much as I used to. The reason I just told you this is that I realize I've missed so many of your posts now, when there was a time I knew most of them.

But upon returning to your work, after over a week, I am so glad this is what I read.

And this: "...tangle of my hair and I went heavy." How do you do this? I actually kind of know the answer, which is kind of that you don't know (Lol) because we have written to each other about this. But still,

I am still constantly amazed by your talent, Holly. So glad I read this.

Deer Girl's avatar

Hey! Thank you. I’ve been editing a lot recently which is interesting because it’s a different process – less intuitive and more logical. :)

Kelly Trost's avatar

Hi Holly,

I understand you very well. Mine poems are almost intuitive. But certain poems are entirely cognitive. I need to pay attention to this difference in your writing process, see if I can actually notice it.

I hope you have a great afternoon.

⋆ 𝑴𝒂𝒅𝒉𝒖𝒓𝒊 ⋆'s avatar

this is so very beautiful! especially the last lines hit deep✨✨

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you very much M! :-)

The Emergent Spiral's avatar

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Deer Girl's avatar

This wins the comment section! 🐇

The Emergent Spiral's avatar

It does not format like the old Nokia used to though.

Christopher Van Name's avatar

Hard to unleash the fire with grace. You’ve done it.

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you!

Paul R. Pace's avatar

i absolutely adore this. Thank you for writing.

Deer Girl's avatar

I’m very glad! Thanks for reading, Paul :)

Jolene Thibodeaux's avatar

Pretty

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you Jolene <3

Michael Drummond's avatar

Wow that was steamy!!! Omg! It's always fun reading your work and is this by chance a Moby Dick reference?

Deer Girl's avatar

Not intentionally a Moby Dick reference! And thank you :)

Andrew Lynch's avatar

So good.

Deer Girl's avatar

Thanks Andrew!

voidlight alchemy (em)'s avatar

Reading this was a sensational experience 🖤 beautifully done

Deer Girl's avatar

Thank you very much Em 🩶